written by S Bar-David (Shimon Wincelberg) and Oliver Crawford
Story by Oliver Crawford
FINAL DRAFT, dated September 15, 1966
report & analysis by David Eversole

Not much was changed between this draft and what was aired.

Kirk has another exchange with Ferris that never made it to air. Ferris points out the futility of searching for the Galileo by saying that even Kirk said it was akin to searching for a needle in a haystack. Continuing such a futile search is ridiculous, says Ferris. Kirk says, "Not when you want your needle back bad enough."

McCoy gives the old "Ashes to ashes, dust to dust" speech over Gaetano's grave.

Scotty has a small scene with Yeoman Mears, assuring her that all will be fine.

Yeoman Mears is referenced by that name throughout the script, but in one bit of narrative she is referred to as "Janice," thus bearing out the rumor that this script was indeed written with Janice Rand in that role.

McCoy's line in the aired episode that goes something like, "Thank God I lived to see the day" in reference to Spock admitting an error in logic was not scripted.

S BAR-DAVID(which stands for Shimon, Son of David) was a pseudonym used by writer Shimon Wincelberg (1924-2004): a writer, playwright and television scenarist who used many aspects of his Orthodox Jewish beliefs in his work. He wrote short stories for Harper's Bazaar, The New Yorker and Punch. During his forty-nine years (1947 to 1996) in the film industry, he wrote for Mannix, Police Woman, Planet of the Apes (the television series), Logan's Run, The Paper Chase, Trapper John, M. D. and Law and Order. For Star Trek, he wrote "Dagger of the Mind" (under his pseudonym) and "The Galileo Seven" as Shimon Wincelberg. For the aborted Star Trek: Phase II he wrote "Lord Bobby's Obsession."

OLIVER CRAWFORD (pseudonym of Oliver Kaufman) (1917-1995): Television and film writer and producer from 1947 to 1985. Crawford was one of the few writers who was able to regain his career after being placed on the infamous Blacklist of the late-40s/early-50s for his political beliefs. He wrote for the tops shows of the 60s and 70s--Rawhide, Bonanza, Gilligan's Island, The Wild Wild West, Land of The Giants, Mannix and Kojak. For Star Trek, he wrote the story for "The Galileo Seven," the teleplay for "Let That Be Your Last Battlefield" (Story by Lee Cronin (Gene L. Coon)) and "The Cloudminders" (story by David Gerrold and Margaret Armen).

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