written by D.C. Fontana
NO DRAFT OR DATE GIVEN
(possibly November 1966, based on other episodes)
report & analysis by Dave Eversole
It is a late draft, probably a Final, as
there is little difference between it and what was shot.
A few odds and ends:
INT. TRANSPORTER ROOM - ANGLE ON DOOR
as the door snaps open and McCoy enters. CAMERA PULLS BACK TO WIDER ANGLE
REVEALING the Sergeant moving toward McCoy, greatly agitated.SERGEANT
(indicating Transporter Chief)
I told him I didn't want a doctor...
McCOY
All right, what do you want?
SERGEANT
Answers! Nobody tells me anything!
First I get yanked in here without so
much as a by-your-leave. And then
people go fizzling in and out of that
contraption... and chicken soup out
of the wall...
McCOY
Chicken soup?
SERGEANT
(goes right on)
... and nobody says anything to me.
I want to know what's coming off!
McCOY
Well, essentially speaking... you are.
All that for a rather lame McCoy punchline. We then go back to the episode which is as filmed.
UPDATE
Nathan Hardy, a reader of this site, was kind enough to transcribe Robert H. Justman's memo in which he sketched out the basic plot of what would become "Tomorrow is Yesterday."
TO : GENE RODDENBERRY
FROM : BOB JUSTMAN
DATE : APRIL 12, 1966
SUBJECT : STORY IDEA by BOB JUSTMANDear Gene :
The Enterprise is returning to earth where refitting, rotation of crew, taking on of supplies, etc, is planned. On approaching earth there is a malfunction of the ship's machinery with regard to its time warp capabilities. The Enterprise, due to this malfunction, does arrive back at a familiar planet which, of course, does turn out to be earth. But this is the earth of 1966 and not of their time.
There follows a situation with which we are becoming familiar. Every spring, about this time, there are sighting reports of UFOs. The Enterprise's shadow craft is sighted and is identified as a UFO. Kirk and Spock and the others realize upon contact with the denizens of the earth where they are in time. Thereupon, our story develops and Kirk begins to see that by breaking through time, he is starting off a whole new and different sequence of events, which will affect the history and civilization of out planet in future years. Who knows where this will lead? Perhaps it will turn out that he and Spock and the Enterprise and its crew will therefore never really exist in the future. He will also see that the whole future course of events will be changed so radically, as to cause irreparable damage to any future earth civilization. Thereupon, the problem arises as to how they are to go back and change what they have already set in motion.
Finally, after much experimentation with the ship's machinery, they do in fact go back to the moment when they arrive back at the earth in 1966. UFO reports go out again, but Kirk and the Enterprise disappear before any contact can be made with our 1966 world denizens. There only remains on earth the usual mass of spring UFO sighting reports, which is checked out by various governmental agencies and found to be without foundation.
Regards,
BOB JUSTMAN
cc : John D.F. Black
Nathan comments:
So the idea was clearly Justman's as a solo story, but at some point D.C. Fontana began working on it, and perhaps suggested tacking it on to the back of "Naked Time". Fontana has been quoted as saying she swore she never saw the Justman memo and came up with the idea herself. There were no hard feelings between Justman and Fontana; Justman wrote plenty of memos encouraging her work as the script developed, but Justman ended up quite pissed at Roddenberry for refusing to pay him for the outline.
D. C. (DOROTHY CATHERINE) FONTANA (1939-2019): Gene Roddenberry's assistant, and after her first sale of a script to Bonanza, she soon began writing for Star Trek. Her work for the Star Trek franchise includes "Charlie X" (Story by Gene Roddenberry), "Tomorrow Is Yesterday," "This Side of Paradise" (Story by Nathan Butler (Jerry Sohl)), "Journey To Babel," "Friday's Child," "By Any Other Name" (w/Jerome Bixby), "The Ultimate Computer" (Story by Lawrence N. Wolfe), "The Enterprise Incident," "That Which Survives" (Story, using her pseudonym Michael Richards), "The Way To Eden" (Story, using her pseudonym Michael Richards). In addition, in 1995, after nearly thirty years, Fontana finally revealed to Harlan Ellison that it was she who rewrote the majority of the aired version of his "The City On The Edge of Forever." Fontana went on to serve as the story editor, script supervisor and associate producer for the animated Star Trek series. In addition to her duties, she wrote "Yesteryear." When Roddenberry decided to bring forth Star Trek: The Next Generation, he turned to Fontana, Justman and Gerrold. Unfortunately, she and Roddenberry had several disagreements, and among her few contributions to Modern Trek were "Encounter At Farpoint" (w/Gene Roddenberry) and Star Trek: Deep Space Nine's "Dax." Ms. Fontana has also written for Ghost Story, Fastastic Journey, The Six Million Dollar Man, Babylon 5, and presently is writing for the fan-made film series Star Trek: New Voyages.
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