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A look at the earlier drafts of the original Star Trek episodes and a comparison to the aired versions. We'll also take a look at the deleted scenes and purchased scripts that were never produced.

Episodes/Scripts Produced
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Titles in Black Not Yet Reviewed

The Cage
written by Gene Roddenberry
REVISED DRAFT, dated November 20, 1964
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Where No Man Has Gone Before
written by Samuel A. Peeples
FIRST DRAFT, dated May 27, 1965
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Where No Man Has Gone Before
written by Samuel A. Peeples
FINAL REVISED DRAFT, dated July 9, 1965
(with further revised pages inserted, dated 14 and 15 July 1965)

report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The Corbomite Maneuver
written by Jerry Sohl
FINAL DRAFT, dated May 3, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Mudd's Women
written by Stephen Kandel
Story by Gene Roddenberry
FINAL DRAFT, dated May 26, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The Enemy Within
written by Richard Matheson
FINAL DRAFT, dated May 3, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole
additional explanation by Randy Landers

The Man Trap
written by George Clayton Johnson
FINAL DRAFT, dated June 16, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The Naked Time
written by John D.F. Black
FINAL DRAFT, dated June 28, 1966
(with revised pages, dated July 1, July 5, and a NEW ENDING, dated August 11, 1966)
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Charlie X
written by D. C. Fontana
story by Gene Roddenberry
FINAL DRAFT, dated July 5, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Balance of Terror
written by Paul Schneider
NO DRAFT EDITION OR DATE GIVEN
(with revised pages dated July 19, 20, 21, 22, 1966)
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

What Are Little Girls Made of?
written by Robert Bloch
REVISED FINAL DRAFT, dated July 27, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Dagger of the Mind
written by S Bar-David (Shimon Wincelberg)
REVISED FINAL DRAFT, dated August 5, 1966
(with further revised pages dated August 6 and August 8, 1966)
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Miri
written by Adrian Spies
FINAL DRAFT, dated August 12, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The Conscience of the King
written by Barry Trivers
FINAL REVISED DRAFT, dated September 8, 1966
(with revised pages, dated September 12, 13, 14, 15, 19, 20, 22, 1966)
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The Galileo Seven
written by S Bar-David (Shimon Wincelberg) and Oliver Crawford
Story by Oliver Crawford
FINAL DRAFT, dated September 15, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Court-Martial
written by Don M. Mankiewicz and Steven W. Carabatsos
Story by Don M. Mankiewicz
FINAL DRAFT, dated September 26, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The Menagerie
written by Gene Roddenberry
FINAL DRAFT, dated October 7, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Shore Leave
written by Theodore Sturgeon
FINAL DRAFT, dated October 14, 1966
(with revised pages dated October 18, 19, 21, 1966)
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The Squire of Gothos
written by Paul Schneider
FINAL DRAFT, dated October 16, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The Return of The Archons
written by Boris Sobelman
Story by Gene Roddenberry
FIRST DRAFT, dated November 1, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Arena
written by Gene L. Coon
Story by Fredric Brown
FINAL DRAFT, dated November 3, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The Alternative Factor
written by Don Ingalls
FIRST DRAFT, undated
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The Alternative Factor
written by Don Ingalls
FINAL DRAFT, dated November 11, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Tomorrow Is Yesterday
written by D.C. Fontana
NO DRAFT OR DATE GIVEN
(possibly November 1966, based on other episodes)
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

A Taste of Armageddon
written by Robert Hamner and Gene L. Coon
REVISED FINAL DRAFT, dated December 12, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Space Seed
written by Gene L. Coon
Story by Gene L. Coon and Carey Wilber
SECOND REVISED FINAL, dated December 13, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The Devil In The Dark
written by Gene L. Coon
FINAL DRAFT, dated December 22, 1966
(with revised pages dated December 28, 1966 & January 6, 16, 18, 1967)
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

This Side of Paradise
written by D. C. Fontana
story by D. C. Fontana and Nathan Butler (pseudonym of Jerry Sohl)
FINAL DRAFT, dated December 15, 1966
(with further revisions, dated December 28, 1966)
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Errand of Mercy
written by Gene L. Coon
FIRST DRAFT, dated January 3, 1967
REVISED FINAL DRAFT, dated January 23, 1967
(this article is based on the revised final draft)
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The City on the Edge of Forever
written by Harlan Ellison
FIRST DRAFT, dated June 13, 1966
also

SECOND REVISED FINAL DRAFT, dated December 1, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The City on the Edge of Forever (Carabatsos Rewrite)
written by Steven Carabatsos
REVISED DRAFT, dated October 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The City on the Edge of Forever (Fontana Rewrite)
written by Harlan Ellison
(final uncredited rewrite by D. C. Fontana)
SHOOTING SCRIPT, dated January 30, 1967
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Operation -- Annihilate!
written by Steven W. Carabatsos
2nd REVISED FINAL DRAFT, dated February 13, 1967
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Metamorphosis
written by Gene L. Coon
FIRST DRAFT, dated April 19, 1967
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Friday's Child
written by D.C. Fontana
FIRST DRAFT, dated April 20, 1967
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Friday's Child
written by D.C. Fontana
unspecificed draft excerpt, undated
report & analysis by Dave Eversole
script excerpt courtesy of Audrey Anderson & Curt McAloney

Who Mourns for Adonais? 
teleplay by Gilbert A. Ralston and Gene L. Coon
story by Gilbert A. Ralston
FINAL DRAFT SCRIPT: May 15, 1967
Review, Analysis, and Report by Dave Tilotta

Journey to Babel
written by D.C. Fontana
SECOND REVISED FINAL DRAFT, Dated 9/19/67
with revised pages dated 9/20, 9/21, and 9/26
Review, Analysis, and Report by Dave Tilotta

Mission Into Chaos
The Precursor to "A Piece of the Action"
written by David P. Harmon and Gene L. Coon
FIRST DRAFT, dated September 28, 1967
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Assignment: Earth
written by Art Wallace
Story by Gene Roddenberry & Art Wallace
REVISED FIRST DRAFT, dated December 20, 1967
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The Last Gunfight
written by Lee Cronin (Gene L. Coon)
REVISED FINAL DRAFT SCRIPT, Dated 5/14/68
with revised pages dated 5/16, 5/17, 5/20, 5/22, 5/24, 5/27, and 5/28
review, analysis, and report by Dave Tilotta

The Enterprise Incident
written by D.C. Fontana
FIRST DRAFT, dated June 7, 1968
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

And the Children Shall Lead 
written by Edward J. Lasko
FINAL DRAFT SCRIPT, dated June 21, 1968
with revisions dated 6/24, 6/25, 6/26, 7/1, and 7/2
review, analysis and report by Dave Tilotta

The Lights of Zetar
written by Jeremy Tarcher and Shari Lewis
FINAL DRAFT, dated October 28, 1968
with revised pages dated 10/31, 11/1, 11/4 and 11/8
report, review & analysis by Dave Tilotta

The Savage Curtain
written by Gene Roddenberry & Arthur Heinemann
Story by Gene Roddenberry
unspecificed draft excerpt, undated
report & analysis by Dave Eversole
script excerpt courtesy of Audrey Anderson & Curt McAloney

 

Outlines which Evolved into Episodes

The Cage
written by Gene Roddenberry
PILOT STORY OUTLINE, FIRST DRAFT, dated June 29, 1964

The Fuzzies  
A Precursor to "The Trouble With Tribbles"
written by David Gerrold
STORY PREMISE, dated February 1967
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Mirror, Mirror
written by Jerome Bixby
STORY OUTLINE, dated March 2, 1967
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The Apple
written by Max Ehrlich
STORY OUTLINE, dated May 4, 1967
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

A Fuzzy Thing Happened To Me...
A Precursor to "The Trouble With Tribbles"
written by David Gerrold
STORY OUTLINE, dated June 17, 1967
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Assignment: Earth
The Outline for the non-Star Trek Series Pilot
written by Gene Roddenberry
FIRST DRAFT PILOT, dated November 14, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Bem
written by David Gerrold
STORY OUTLINE and BEM sketches, dated March 14, 1968
REVISED OUTLINE, dated April 4, 1968

The Paleface
The Precursor to "The Paradise Syndrome"
written by Margaret Armen
STORY OUTLINE, dated March 22, 1968
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The Last Gunfight
The Precursor to "Spectre of The Gun"
written by Lee Cronin (Gene L. Coon)
STORY OUTLINE, dated April 19, 1968
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Spock's Brain
written by Lee Cronin (Gene L. Coon)
STORY OUTLINE, dated April 22, 1968
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

In Essence--Nothing
The Precursor to "The Tholian Web"
written by J. A. Burns & C. L. Richards
STORY OUTLINE, dated May 1, 1968

The Empath
written by Joyce Muskat
STORY OUTLINE, dated May 7, 1968
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Turnabout Intruder
written by Gene Roddenberry
STORY OUTLINE, dated May 8, 1968
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Is There In Truth No Beauty?
written by Jean Lisette Aroeste
STORY OUTLINE, dated May 24, 1968
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Day of The Dove
written by Jerome Bixby
STORY OUTLINE, dated June 3, 1968
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The Sons of Socrates
The Precursor to "Plato's Stepchildren"
written by Meyer Dolinsky
STORY OUTLINE, dated June 13, 1968
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The Mark of Gideon 
written by George F. Slavin & Stanley Adams
STORY OUTLINE, dated July 12, 1968
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Joanna
The Precursor to "The Way to Eden"
written by D.C. Fontana
STORY OUTLINE REVISED, dated August 27, 1968
(with further revised pages, dated September 5, 1968)
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

A Handful of Dust
The Precursor to "All Our Yesterdays"
written by Jean Lisette Aroeste
STORY OUTLINE, dated September 23, 1968
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Scripts & Outlines which Evolved into Movies

In Thy Image 
The Precursor to Star Trek: The Motion Picture
written by Alan Dean Foster
STORY TREATMENT, dated July 31, 1977
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

In Thy Image
The Precursor to Star Trek: The Motion Picture
written by Harold Livingston
Story by Alan Dean Foster
ROUGH FIRST DRAFT, dated October 20, 1977
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Star Trek III: Return To Genesis  
written by Harve Bennett
STORY OUTLINE, dated September 16, 1982
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Outlines which Never Became Episodes

Warrior's World
written by Stephen Kandel
STORY OUTLINE, dated April 22, 1965
STORY OUTLINE, dated April 28, 1965
STORY OUTLINE, dated May 7, 1965

Image of the Beast
written by Philip Jose Farmer
STORY OUTLINE, dated March 17, 1966

Mere Shadows
written by Philip Jose Farmer
STORY OUTLINE, dated March 26, 1966

The Uncoiler
written by Philip Jose Farmer
STORY OUTLINE, dated April 1, 1966
REVISED OUTLINE, dated April 5, 1966

Journey to Reolite
written by Alfred Brenner
STORY OUTLINE, dated April 18, 1966

The Web of Death
written by William Shatner
STORY OUTLINE, dated April 29, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Rites of Fertility
written by Robert Sheckley
STORY OUTLINE, dated May 6, 1966

Return to Eden
written by Alvin Boretz
STORY OUTLINE, dated May 9, 1966
REVISED OUTLINE, dated May 23, 1966

Sister in Space
written by Robert Sheckley
STORY OUTLINE, dated June 14, 1966

The Squaw
written by Shimon Wincelberg
STORY OUTLINE, dated July 15, 1966
REVISED OUTLINE, dated July 28, 1966

Rock-a-Bye-Baby, Or Die!
written by George Clayton Johnson
STORY OUTLINE, dated August 2, 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Tomorrow Was Yesterday
written by David Gerrold
STORY OUTLINE, dated September 1966
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Bandi
written by David Gerrold
STORY PREMISE, dated February 1967
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The Protracted Man
written By David Gerrold
STORY PREMISE, dated February 1967
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Machines Are Better
written by A.E. Van Vogt
STORY OUTLINE, dated March 29, 1967

Destination: Infinity
written by Robert Barry
STORY OUTLINE, dated March 30, 1967

The Orchard People
written by Catherine Turney and John Collier
STORY OUTLINE, dated April 3, 1967

The Search for Eternity
written by A.E. Van Vogt
STORY OUTLINE, dated April 11, 1967

He Walked Among Us
written by Norman Spinrad
STORY OUTLINE, dated May 12, 1967
STORY OUTLINE, dated May 17, 1967
STORY OUTLINE, dated May 18, 1967
TELEPLAY, dated September 28, 1967

The Joy Machine (also known as "The Root of Evil")
written by Theodore Sturgeon
STORY OUTLINE, dated May 16, 1967
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

The Joy Machine (also known as "The Root of Evil")
written by Theodore Sturgeon
STORY OUTLINE, dated June 23, 1967
FIRST DRAFT TELEPLAY, dated October 21, 1968 (credited to Meyer Dolinsky)

Aladdin's Asteroid
written by Robert Barry
STORY OUTLINE, dated May 22, 1967

The Lost Star 
written by John Meredyth Lucas
STORY OUTLINE, dated June 24, 1967
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Shol
written by Darlene Hartman
STORY OUTLINE, dated July 15, 1967
STORY OUTLINE, dated July 24, 1967
FIRST DRAFT TELEPLAY, dated August 23, 1967
(this article is based on the July 24 story outline)
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Pandora's Box
written by Daniel Aubry
STORY PITCH, dated August 29, 1967

The Godhead
written by John Meredyth Lucas
STORY OUTLINE, dated March 15, 1968
REVISED OUTLINE, dated April 17, 1968
OUTLINE, dated November 7, 1968
this article is based on the 15 page November 1968 outline
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

Beware of Gryptons Bearing Gifts
written by David P. Harmon
STORY OUTLINE, dated April 16, 1968

Shore Leave II
written by Theodore Sturgeon
STORY OUTLINE, dated April 24, 1968

The Aurorals
written by Frank Paris
STORY OUTLINE, dated June 13, 1968 & June 20, 1968

The Beast
written by Marc Daniels
STORY OUTLINE, dated July 1, 1968

The Forseeable Future
written by Jean Lisette Aroeste
STORY OUTLINE, dated August 22, 1968 & September 16, 1968

Perchance To Dream
written By J. M. Winston
STORY OUTLINE, dated June 28, 1969
report & analysis by Dave Eversole

For They Shall Inherit
written by Jerome Bixby
STORY OUTLINE, undated

The Forbidden
written by Hank Stine
STORY OUTLINE, undated

The Forces
written by Charles Parker
STORY OUTLINE, undated

From the First Day to the Last
unknown author
DRAFT, undated

Mother Tiger
written by Jerome Bixby
STORY PITCH, undated

Skal
written by Jerome Bixby
STORY OUTLINE, undated

Sleeping Beauty
written by Robert Bloch
STORY OUTLINE, undated

The Surrender of Planet X
written by Don Masselink
STORY OUTLINE, undated

Untitled
written by Jerome Bixby
STORY OUTLINE, undated

Untitled
written by Robert Sheckley
STORY OUTLINE, undated

The V.I.P.'s
written by Gene Lesser and Malachi Throne
STORY OUTLINE, undated

The Pastel Terror
written by Larry Niven
STORY OUTLINE, dated around 1967-1969 (but never submitted)
published in the fanzine Apa-L, 1971 and in the fanzine T-Negative 17, 1972
now available on-line here
report & analysis by Dave Eversole


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